I took an extract from a Roald Dahl story - 'The Witches'.

"I cannot permit mice in

my hotel, madam," he said to my grand-mother.

"How dare you say that when your rotten hotel is full of

rats anyway!" my grandmother cried.

"Rats!" cried Mr Stringer, going mauve in the face.

"There are no rats in this hotel!"

"I saw one this very morning," my grandmother said. "It

was running down the corridor into the kitchen!"

"That is not true!" cried Mr Stringer.

"You had better get the rat-catcher in at once," my

grandmother said, "before I report you to the Public

Health Authorities. I expect there's rats scuttling all over

the kitchen floor and stealing the food off the shelves

and jumping in and out of the soup!"

"Never!" cried Mr Stringer.

"No wonder my breakfast toast was all nibbled round

the edges this morning," my grandmother went on

relentlessly. "No wonder it had a nasty ratty taste. If

you're not careful, the Health people will be ordering the

entire hotel to be closed before everyone gets typhoid

fever."

"You are not being serious, madam," Mr Stringer said.48

"I was never more serious in my life," my grand-mother

said. "Are you or are you not going to allow my

grandson to keep his white mice in his room?"

The Manager knew when he was beaten. "May I

suggest a compromise, madam?" he said.

I found that unreliable techniques were shown through the use of a fake anecdote that the grandmother uses in this extract "I saw one this very morning," my grandmother said. "It

was running down the corridor into the kitchen!", so I incorporated this into my text. Also I discovered that punctuation was key, in showing deception - the grandmother uses exclamation marks frequently to show this. I used ellipsis to highlight the dishonesty instead. The 'Witches' includes a sentence 'The Manager knew when he was beaten.' this shows how despite the lies, he didn't have the energy or time to argue, this sentences meaning fits into my text so I added something similar...

(Talking to herself in the mirror) I can not believe I'm a millionaire, I'm living the dream... I'm so glad I bought that scratch card . I said to myself, Margaret that card has your name on it, by it girl (smiling ferociously) and I WON, I'm a winner, W, I, N, N, E,R what does that spell (ding-dong, the door bell rings) Winn...

(Margaret opens the door, in her old scruffy clothes before embarking on her proposed shopping spree  for this afternoon)

‘Oh... Hey Julie’

‘Hey Margaret – I was thinking today if your not busy, did you want to raid the charity shops and find some new clothing delights, like we did last week? Before you say no, have you seen that tea stained, threading top you are wearing...  I think its time you bought some new clothes and I know you're broke, so don't worry this shopping trip is on me!’

‘Oh I...’ (she ponders, wondering whether to tell Julie of her new found fortune)

‘Come on treat yourself! I want to help you, it will make me happy, come on you know you want to put a smile on this old girls face?’

I cant lie... but then if I just ‘forget’ to mention that’s not a lie, surely... I'm making her happy if I go (knowing she's beaten she agrees)

‘Sure that will be greeeeat... I'm in desperate need of new clothes’

‘Yay, so I was thinking how about we have a £10 spending cap between us, meddle up some bargains, my treat? I am answering before you can say no , yeah sounds great – you totally saved my savings for food this week’

‘Oh right, thanks... Yeah you totally did... I had a jar full of coppers just waiting to be spent on food, I was really worried that I might have spent it and not have had enough money for the essentials – oh its a hard life...’

‘Just call me your hero from now on!’ (she said beaming)